Posted by DRD #37 at adsl-154-13-41.asm.bellsouth.net on October 21, 2003 at 19:38:33:
In Reply to: thank you everybody posted by grizzly on October 21, 2003 at 19:28:58:
Not trying to make you feel dumb here, but you made a few mistakes, mostly very minor.
: 4. Approximately 97 percent of the earth’s water is in oceans and an additional 2 percent is in glaciers and icecaps.
: Approximately 97 percent of the Earth’s water is in oceans, and an additional 2 percent is in glaciers and icecaps.
You didn't necessarily need the comma after "oceans"; however, it is still plausible. I'm not sure if they'll take off for this or not.
: 9. The entire system is state of the art and we have made it even better.
: The entire system is state of the art, and we have made it even better.
Like before, the comma isn't entirely necessary, though it is still quite plausible.
: 15. The August 14 2001 issue of the National Times carried the full story of the kidnapping.
: The August 14, 2001, issue of the National Times carried the full story of the kidnapping.
The comma after "2001" isn't needed, though the one after "14" is.
: 16. To learn to ride a unicycle practice on a bicycle first; until you get your sense of balance.
: To learn to ride a unicycle, first practice on a bicycle until you get your sense of balance.
You didn't need to rearrange the sentence, but it may be better that you had.
Just trying to help, though it's a little late for the new corrections.