Posted by PretzelFan at cpe-203-45-192-112.qld.bigpond.net.au on February 07, 2002 at 07:40:49:
In Reply to: I need some quick help posted by PeterParker on February 07, 2002 at 06:46:50:
: Which of these sounds better. I need to include them in a poem today for the girl. Just give an honoest opinion. Thanks
:
: 1.When tears fall where we once laid,
: I never let the thoughts fade.
when gives the idea of in future.
: 2.As tears fall where we once laid,
: I’ll never let the thoughts fade.
as gives the thought of right here right now
: 3.While tears fall where we once laid,
: I never let the thoughts fade.
while gives the impression been there. done that.
you seem to be attached to the second line so thats all the interpretation i can get.