Posted by PeterParker at nr7-66-161-180-234.fuse.net on February 07, 2002 at 18:22:39:
In Reply to: Re: I need some quick help posted by Lady Deena of Palatine on February 07, 2002 at 07:03:58:
: : Which of these sounds better. I need to include them in a poem today for the girl. Just give an honoest opinion. Thanks
:
: : 1.When tears fall where we once laid,
: : I never let the thoughts fade.
: I'd go with a variation of this one, but change the second line a bit...something like
: When tears fall where we once laid
: These *** thoughts will never fade
: *** insert a descriptive word that expresses the sentiment...I'd help, but I'm not sure what message you are sending.
: Just my thoughts :)