Posted by Lady Deena of Palatine at spider-wb054.proxy.aol.com on February 07, 2002 at 07:03:58:
In Reply to: I need some quick help posted by PeterParker on February 07, 2002 at 06:46:50:
: Which of these sounds better. I need to include them in a poem today for the girl. Just give an honoest opinion. Thanks
: 1.When tears fall where we once laid,
: I never let the thoughts fade.
I'd go with a variation of this one, but change the second line a bit...something like
When tears fall where we once laid
These *** thoughts will never fade
*** insert a descriptive word that expresses the sentiment...I'd help, but I'm not sure what message you are sending.
Just my thoughts :)