Posted by Mr Writer at 212.187.155.91 on March 24, 2004 at 07:48:26:
In Reply to: I thought you'd like that posted by Will Turner, Karaoke King on March 24, 2004 at 07:38:07:
But if your tutor is marking it - you might as well change to keep him/her/it happy. You could use something like, i don't know, murky deep or saltwater mass.
I think cutting it back would be difficult, as all is important to the plot. Maybe you'll just have to cut a line here and there instead of entire sections.
: I just came out of a tutorial and I need to trim it back a bit, change some of the words (My tutor didn't like the use of the words "briny deep".) Any thoughts?
: : I enjoyed it. I especially liked the lead characters Christian name - very wholesome.