Posted by Will Turner, Karaoke King at nat0.ucc.ac.uk on March 24, 2004 at 07:51:47:
In Reply to: I see nothing wrong with "briny deep" posted by Mr Writer on March 24, 2004 at 07:48:26:
It's hard to get the kind of gothic/dark humour angle I'm going for.
: But if your tutor is marking it - you might as well change to keep him/her/it happy. You could use something like, i don't know, murky deep or saltwater mass.
: I think cutting it back would be difficult, as all is important to the plot. Maybe you'll just have to cut a line here and there instead of entire sections.
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: : I just came out of a tutorial and I need to trim it back a bit, change some of the words (My tutor didn't like the use of the words "briny deep".) Any thoughts?
: : : I enjoyed it. I especially liked the lead characters Christian name - very wholesome.