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Posted by Kimberlieo at ac994e34.ipt.aol.com on January 24, 2003 at 00:03:49:

Buried
to my neck
the fragile surface cracks and reforms
with each breath
grit in uncomfortable places
blisters on pale skin
the surf rises
and I am
Buried
some days I want to crawl
right down into the earth
pull a blanket of sod
over my head
and sleep
until I am
no more
Buried

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heres what I would do enigmaramous 11:04:45 1/25/03 (0)
You seem like a Tom Waits fan to me... rcpweiner 00:32:31 1/24/03 (6)
- Never heard of him. Kimberlieo 00:33:38 1/24/03 (5)
  - Ummm... JERSEY GIRL. DarkFather 02:19:51 1/24/03 (0)
  - Probably none... rcpweiner 00:35:10 1/24/03 (3)
    - Maybe tomorrow Kimberlieo 00:37:42 1/24/03 (2)
      - Yikes.... rcpweiner 00:40:27 1/24/03 (1)
        
        Nah Kimberlieo 00:42:45 1/24/03 (0)
Impressive.... rcpweiner 00:25:02 1/24/03 (1)
- Re: Impressive.... Kimberlieo 00:29:13 1/24/03 (0)
It doesn't rhyme. Where's the skill? *nt* C.Jay(RST) 00:22:50 1/24/03 (3)
- Ok an old one, just for you Kimberlieo 00:27:39 1/24/03 (2)
  - Why is everything dying... rcpweiner 00:31:54 1/24/03 (1)
    - I'll work on it....nt Kimberlieo 00:32:54 1/24/03 (0)
That was cheery *NT* Jack Spencer Jr 00:20:58 1/24/03 (0)
It could use the "fuck" word in it - Something-Like-37 00:19:54 1/24/03 (2)
- Re: It could use the "fuck" word in it - Kimberlieo 00:23:47 1/24/03 (1)
  - Whoa ... lol - no pun intended. (NT) Something-Like-37 00:35:35 1/24/03 (0)
What is it? Lyrics? Une poeme? Haiku?...nt BChrist 00:06:01 1/24/03 (4)
- Its a Whatever...nt Kimberlieo 00:07:11 1/24/03 (3)
  - OK..Sounds kind of deep..a little personal... BChrist 00:15:13 1/24/03 (1)
    - Yeah Kimberlieo 00:22:01 1/24/03 (0)
  - it is late. Sleep well. Kimberlieo 00:14:09 1/24/03 (0)

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