Posted by lookoutcow at bbnow-113.bbnow.com on July 20, 2000 at 16:29:22:
could i get some input on what i have so far.......
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opening: Dave is sitting on his couch at home. Dave looks directly at the camera.
Dave: oh, hey, how's it goin' ? i bet your wonderin' why i've asked you here tonight.
heh, always wanted to say that, anyway, i'm gonna tell ya the story about how
i met the perfect girl, or so i thought.
Dave looks off camera to the left.
Dave: ok cue the ringing phone!
Dave goes back to staring blankly a the t.v. screen as if he never talked to the camera
the phone rings...
Dave reacts to the phone ringing. he reaches down next to him to pick up the
phone, still staring at the t.v. close camera shot of his hand looking for the phone but it's
not there. but the phone is still ringing. Dave looks down to where the phone should be.
to himself:
Dave: (mumbling) well, where the hell is it?"
the phone is still ringing. he starts looking around the room. in the couch cushins. the
phone is still ringing. Dave stands up and , close up of his head. his eyes looking around
franticly, his ears moving, trying to find out where the ringing is coming from. the phone is
still ringing. out of the corner of his eye, he spots the phone; or so he thinks. he dives into
a corner of the room, and grabs the object. puts it to his ear and answers.:
Dave: hello?! HELLO?!
the phone is STILL ringing
Dave pulls the phone from his ear. it's the remote control. Dave tosses it to the floor. the phone
is still ringing. he's still lying on the floor. his eyes dart to the phone charger. as expected the
phone is on the charger. his head slumps to the floor in an "of course" type of way. the phone
is still ringing.Dave realizes this and quickly crawls , sliding down the stairs, and
grabs the phone, finally. puts the phone to his ear and answers:
Dave: (exhausted) yea? (panting) hello?..............................................oh, hey james, wasup?
.......no, i was uh, lifffting...weights.......yes i do! i do not just sit around watching t.v.............really?
cool, who's gonna be there?.............................allright, what time?.......who's place?.....no i don't
know her........oh, Stan does.......then i guess i'll give him a call and find out. ok, later.......
Dave hangs up the phone.
roll opening credits.............
setting:
a big fucking party, late night.
f/i: full frame on a front door.
three figures enter into the frame.
they are :
Dave: a regular guy, likes to have fun, he's the guy everyone trusts, and talks to.
Stan: the wild and crazy guy of the group, parties a lot, wants nothing more than to just have fun.
Bill: the ladies man of the group, his ex-girlfriend had him on a
tight leash, recently broke up, and is starting to get out again.
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Bill knocks on the door. from the outside you can hear the party inside, along with music.
no answer. Bill knocks again. they wait for a sec. no answer. Stan looks at the other two.
then looks back at the door.
Stan: "step aside man, ya gotta do it like this, "
then Stan starts pounding on the door.
Stan: " OPEN THE HELL UP YOU DRUNK FUCKS!"
the door opens and a guy starts to yell at the three, (the guys name is Sam)
Sam:" WHO THE FUCK?!--oh, hey wats up? c'mon in"
the three enter the apartment, we now see, what we heard outside.
Dave:(to Sam) so, did James make it yet?"
Sam: "yea, he was our first causulty(?) so we threw him in the corner"
the camera then gives a shot of James in the corner, passed out, ass in the air
Dave:" (laughing) so who's house is this anyway?"
Sam:" ah, that would be Cara's, she's in the bathroom puking"
Stan inturrupts..
Stan:" Christ, and it's only eleven thirty!"
Stan smacks Sam and Dave in the backs of their heads,
Stan: " o.k. ladies it's time to quit with the yappin' and make with the alcohol!"
Stan pushes them aside and proceeds towards the fridge.
Sam looks over at Bill and gives him a very shocked look, and says:
Sam: "Bill, how the FUCK did you get out tonight?"
Sam nudges Dave with his elbow-- and jokingly says
Sam: " does veronica know he's out?"
Bill: " ha ha very funny jackass, actually . ....we broke up."
Sam: " 'bout time if ya ask me."
Dave: "no shit it's been months since we've seen tha' silly bastard, then he (very sarcasticly)
*gasp* calls me, and tells me the sordid story."
Bill: "so here i am, and i'm here to have some fun!"
then an amazing looking girl (cloey) approaches Bill--
Cloey(GIRL): " um, hi your Bill right? Angie told me that you and Veronica broke up....?"
Bill: "actually, (clears throat) yes, yes we did."
Cloey: "REally?!"
then Cloey extends her arm, and Bill takes her arm and they walk off
Sam: "DAMN! bastard just got here, and--
Dave: " i know man, i know........well i'm gonna get fuckin' ripped tonight!
Stan's already had some to drink before we got here, i catch up
with you later, cool?"
Sam: " allright man, i'll be around, in fact i think it's 'bout time to bust out the beer bong!"
Dave: " cool, let me take a couple shots, i gotta lot of catching up to do.."
Sam walks to another room , Dave goes towards the wet bar for a couple of shots.
all kinds of bottles of liquer are on the bar..
Dave: "hmm, where to start?....
Stan walks up with a beer in hand, and leans on the bar.
Stan: "man, stop standin' all sorts a sober an' shit and pour us a couple shots, ya' ninny shit head!"
Dave:"yea, yea i'm on it, how much have you already had to drink in the ten minute span
we've been here?"
Stan: looking at him blankly "what?"
Dave: "nuthin' "
Dave pours the shots.
Dave: " ready?"
Stan: "you know it baby, (raises shot in the air) TO GETTING FUCKING TRASHED!"
Dave: "i'll drink to that."
both cringe and down the shots and slam the glasses on the bar
Stan: "YYYYEEEAAAAHH!"
Dave looks down and shakes his head
Dave: " oh, yea that's what i needed."
Stan slaps him on the back, and walks off to do whatever.
Dave pours another shot and downs it quickly, cringing afterwards
as he's cringing, Jeff passes by him to get to the balcony.Jeff walks outside on the
balcony. on the balcony there is a table with a few chairs around it, Jeff takes a
chair. Jeff is clearly drunk. he looks over at Claire who is sitting across the table from
him.
Jeff: (in a slurred speech) "uh, HEY, what's your name? (goes to lean closer, but loses
his balance and falls down, then pops back up and brushes himself off)
Claire: "Claire, uh, are you o.k.?"
Jeff: " (still slurred) yes, yes i am, by the way, i'm Jeff."(leans in a little closer)
Claire: (a little uneasy) "uh, nice to meet you Jeff. "
Jeff: "yes , yes it is...heh, um, i'm Jeff."
Claire: (realizing he's drunk and not retarded)" i know, so is this your place?"
Jeff: (dazing off )
Claire: " Jeff?"
Jeff: (realizing she's talking to him) "huh? oh, hi, i'm Jeff, what's your name?"
cut to: living room, Alyssa is sitting on the couch, in front of the couch people are
talking, a few drunk girls are dancing around. Alyssa looks bored. sort of
looking around the room. Dave enters and sits on the couch. she looks
over at him.
Alyssa: " oh, hi, y'know i think i know everyone here, but i don't think i've met you."
Dave:"well, now, here's your chance. (smiles) i'm Dave. (extends his hand)
Alyssa: "and i'm Alyssa."(accepts his hand and shakes it)
Dave: "so, (half smile) do you come here often?"(full smile)
Alyssa: " DAVE, could that be a pick up line?"
Dave: (pulls back)no, of course not! (shakes his head) so, what's you sign?"
she laughs
Alyssa: " and i thought i was gonna get the usual barrage of pick up lines here."
Dave: " which are?"
Alyssa: " oh, i don't know how 'bout, is that a mirror in your pocket, 'cause i can see
myself in your pants, and crap like that."
Dave: " oh, no i go for the much more sensative ones like how 'bout a pizza and a fuck?"
Alyssa: (playing along) " exuse me?"
Dave: " what? you don't like pizza?"
both laugh
Stan staggers by, and spots Dave.
Stan:" HEY, MAN, WHHOOO HOOOO!"
Dave:(waves to him, laughing) " hey, buddy, you ok?)
Stan:"FUCKING GRAND, WHOOO HEEEEEE!!"
the camera follows Stan as he walks out the front door and exits. Stan staggers to the
ledge, and looks down, then picks his head up, camera close on his head, Stan looks
extremely dizzy, blinks a few times then, his cheeks puff up and , he pukes down the
shaft of the stairs.
Stan:" BLAAAHAHHAHAHHHHHHHHH"
Stan pick his head back up. and hears a voice coming from down the stairs.
Voice: " HEY , YOU ASSHOLE, I'M GONNA KICK YOUR FUCKING ASS!!"
Stan: (with a snickering smile)"heh, heh, oh, heh, uh oh! heh"
then Stan hurries back inside, slamming the door behind him. walks a couple feet into the
apartment then passes out on the floor.